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Post by Beautypelt on Nov 25, 2006 11:53:39 GMT -5
Hi everyone! Did you know that bears are my second favorite animals? Well, this story is dedicated to bears! I hope you enjoy reading this fictional story! Did you know that 'Nova' means shiny star and 'Lee' means shelter? Nova Lee is a great name for my star black bear! Rain Tribe Nova Lee: Young black she-bear (lead character) Ash Fall: A young black she-bear with a torn ear (Nova Lee's best friend) Acorn Tree: An adult black she-bear (Nova Lee's big sister) Maple Leaf: An adult black she-bear (Nova Lee's mother) Red Wood: An adult black he-bear (Nova Lee's father and Rain Tribe's chief) Honey Bee: An adult black she-bear (Nova Lee's aunt and Maple Leaf's twin sister) Oak Tree: An adult black he-bear (Nova Lee's uncle and Red Wood's little brother) Holy Rain: A wise elderly she-black bear (Nova Lee's grandmother and Rain Tribe's medicine bear and mother of Maple Leaf) Elm Tree: An elderly black he-bear (Nova Lee's grandfather and father of Maple Leaf) Umber Fur: An elderly black she-bear (Nova Lee's grandfather and mother of Red Wood) Blue Jay: An elderly black he-bear (Nova Lee's grandfather and father of Red Wood) Blood Tribe Amber Mist: A young grizzly she-bear Mud Talon: A young grizzly he-bear (Amber Mist's little brother) Hawk Feather: An adult grizzly he-bear (Amber Mist's big brother) Raven Wing: An adult grizzly she-bear (Amber Mist's mother) Gore Fang: An adult grizzly he-bear (Amber Mist's father and Blood Tribe's chief) Sharp Fang: An adult grizzly he-bear (Amber Mist's uncle and Raven Wing's big brother) Rat Fang: An adult grizzly she-bear (Amber Mist's aunt and Raven Wing's big sister) Yellow Moon: An adult grizzly he-bear (Amber Mist's uncle and Gore Fang's little brother) Whispering Shadow: An elderly grizzly she-bear (Amber Mist's grandmother and Blood Tribe's medicine bear and mother of Raven Wing) Cougar Claw: An elderly grizzly he-bear (Amber Mist's grandfather and father of Raven Wing) Night Fall: An elderly grizzly she-bear (Amber Mist's grandmother and mother of Gore Fang) Dark Sky: An elderly grizzly he-bear (Amber Mist's grandfather and father of Gore Fang Snow Tribe Snow Flake: A young polar she-bear Snow Ball: An adult polar she-bear (Snow Flake's big sister) Snow Flurry: An adult polar he-bear (Snow Flake's big brother) Snow Cloud: An adult polar she-bear (Snow Flake's mother) Snow Storm: An adult polar he-bear (Snow Flake's father and Snow Tribe's chief) Snow Fall: An adult polar he-bear (Snow Flake's uncle and Snow Cloud's little brother) Snow Ground: An adult polar she-bear (Snow Flake's aunt and Snow Storm's little sister) Snow Angel: An elderly polar she-bear (Snow Flake's grandmother and Snow Tribe's medicine bear and Snow Cloud's mother) Snow Wind: An elderly polar he-bear (Snow Flake's grandfather and Snow Cloud's father) Blizzard Storm: An elderly polar she-bear (Snow Flake's grandmother and Snow Storm's mother) Blizzard Wind: An elderly polar he-bear (Snow Flake's grandfather and Snow Storm's father I'll do the prolouge either later or tomorrow.
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Post by [[_ moon/beam on Nov 25, 2006 12:03:45 GMT -5
Good allegiances section, I'm intrested to see what the story is about...
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Post by Beautypelt on Nov 25, 2006 15:35:02 GMT -5
Thanks Moony!
I forgot the other bears. Here they are-
Other Bears
Black Storm: A young black he-bear
Ling: An adult panda she-bear (lives at a zoo)
Kojack: An elderly kodiak he-bear (lives at the zoo)
Aba: An adult spectacled she-bear (lives at the zoo)
Brownie: An adult brown she-bear (lives at the zoo)
Sunny: An adult sun she-bear (lives at the zoo)
Frost: A young polar she-bear (lives at the zoo)
Grizzly: An elderly grizzly he-bear (lives at the zoo)
Blackie: An adult black he-bear (lives at the zoo)
Other Animals
Night Wing: A wise old she-raven
Sheena: A light gray she-cat with light blue eyes
Lion: A light tan tom with amber eyes (lives with Sheena)
Sly: An adult he-fox
Rock: A lone adult timber he-wolf
Squeak: A field she-mouse
Slash: A young he-badger
Twilight: An adult she-wolverine
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Post by Beautypelt on Nov 25, 2006 17:02:59 GMT -5
Prolouge
Rain poured down onto my forest home. The wind howled like the wolves. My tribe and I were fighting our Blood Tribe. Blood Tribe were are sworn enemies. My tribe and Blood Tribe have been fighting way before I was born. Allow me to introduce myself. I'm Nova Lee, and I live in Rain Tribe. Tonight were slashing at the at those cougar-hearted Blood Tribe grizzly bears. "Get off of our land!" Roared my father. My father's name is Red Wood, and he's chief of my tribe. "We are not going to leave because your land will become our land!" Snarled Blood Tribe's chief. The Blood Tribe chief is called Gore Fang. If he thinks his tribe can steal our land, he was dead wrong. My father tacked Gore Fang to the ground. My father raised his mighty paw to score Gore Fang's chest. Gore Fang slashed at my father's belly with his foot claws. Cheap shot! My father roared in pain. Gore Fang pushed him to the ground. Gore Fang pounced onto my father. But, my father was ready for him. My father sunk his claws into Gore Fang's back. Now, my father and Gore Fang were both rolling on the ground, refusing to let go. My mother, Maple Leaf, and my big sister, Acorn Tree, were fighting side by side as the battled Mud Talon and Hawk Feather. My mother raked her claws across Hawk Feather's nose. Hawk Feather bellowed in agony. "Give up?!" Snarled my mother. "NEVER!!!" Roared Hawk Feather. My mother and Hawk Feather snarling and chomping at each other. Mud Talon sank his teeth into my sister's belly. My sister swiped her claws across Mud Talon's eye. Her claw pulled out Mud Talon's right eye! Mud Talon wailed in pure agony. Ouch! Getting your eye-ball pulled out! I bet that hurts! I shuddered as I saw that. Mud Talon wailed agian and ran back to his tribe's home. My sister removed the eye-ball off of her claw. "AND DON'T COME BACK!!!" Roared my sister. My aunt, Honey Bee, and my uncle, Oak Tree were slashing and snapping at Sharp Fang and Rat Fang. Honey Bee slashed at Rat Fang's shoulder. "Take that!" Snarled my aunt. Rat Fang head-butted my aunt to the ground. "Not so tough now are ya?" Taunted Rat Fang. Rat Fang pounced onto my aunt. My aunt reared up and threw Rat Fang off. My aunt and Rat Fang chased and swiped at each other. My uncle was ripping out pawfulls of Sharp Fang's fur. Sharp Fang growled menacingly and slashed at my uncle's arm. My uncle reared back and roared in pain. Sharp Fang pushed my uncle down. My uncle tried to get back up, but his arm hurt so badly that fell back down. Sharp Fang laughed and walked towards my uncle. Sharp Fang barred his teeth and leaned his head toward's my uncle's throat. Just when Sharp Fang was about to rip open my uncle's throat, my sister tackled Sharp Fang to the ground. Sharp Fang squirmed as my sister push him harder to the ground. My best friend, Ash Fall, and I were fighting side by side. We were ripping at Yellow Moon. Ash Fall slashed Yellow Moon's shoulder and I slashed at his other shoulder. Yellow Moon bellowed in rage. He pushed both of us down. Yellow Moon turned towards Ash Fall. Just before his claws could touch her, I ripped Yellow Moon's left ear. His ear now has a V shaped scar on his ear. Yello Moon bellowed in rage and pain. He turn towards me and raised his paw to slash at me, but I was quick. I leapt as soon as his claws hit the ground. Just as soon as Yellow Moon got his claws unstuck, Ash Fall leapt onto his back and bit into his shoulder hump. Yellow Moon reared back. Quick as lightning, I slashed a verticle slash wounds on his chest and belly. Yellow Moon bellowed in rage and agony. He fell over. Ash Fall's grip loosened. Yellow Moon managed to shake Ash Fall off. I leapt in front of him. I roared at his face. Yellow Moon screamed and ran back to his home Ash Fall and I chased him. Ash Fall and I chased him back to his home. "AND STAY THERE YOU COWARD!!!" I bellowed. Ash Fall and I ran back to the battle-field, just to see the battle being stopped by my grandmother, Holy Rain. "Stop this battle! Can't you see that we're angering the spirits of Spirit Tribe?" My grandmother growled. Spirit Tribe is a tribe that us tribe bears go when we die. "Look! Lightning in flashing down to the ground! It's a sign that Spirit Tribe doesn't want us to continue this battle!" My grandmother explained. My tribe gasped. "You're just looking for excuses!" Gor Fang snarled. "I'm not looking for excuses! Lightning is flashing! The battle must end!" My grandmother growled. "She's right. We must stop! We have to return to our homes now! Before we anger Spirit Tribe any more!" Raven Wing whispered to Gore Fang. "Very well. We'll stop, but we WILL return! Just you wait! Soon, your land will be our land!" Gore Fang bellowed. The Blood Tribe fled back to their home. Maple Leaf helped my injured uncle onto her back. "For those of you whom are injured, come see me!" my grandmother mewled. my grandmother is Rain Tribe's medicine bear. Most of us were lining upat my grandmother's den. My grandmother walked towards me. "Are you okay?" She asked. "I'm fine. I haven't got a scratch on me." Said I. My grandmother examined me. "You're right. You're probably the only one that's not injured." Said my grandmother. "What are we going to do with those grizzly bears? They're bigger and stronger than us!" I wailed. "Well, the spirits told me that is brave and true bears seek help in Nome, Alaska, they'll meet the biggest and strongest bears in the world. "You mean polar bears?" I gasped. "I tell you more about that tomorrow. Right now, you need to rest. I'll be busy treating our tribe mates." Said my grandmother. I nodded and went to sleep on my sleeping area. 'Polar bears, they might be able to chase away Blood Tribe once and for all!' I thought excitedly. Tomorrow, my grandmother will tell me more about those super bears and how they'll hold the key to our victory.
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Post by Beautypelt on Nov 26, 2006 8:47:30 GMT -5
So, what do y'all think about my story so far?
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Post by Beautypelt on Nov 26, 2006 16:03:26 GMT -5
What do y'all think?
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Post by Tigerfur on Nov 26, 2006 16:31:09 GMT -5
*Claps and whistles* That was FANTASTICK! I can hardly wait for the next chapter!
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Post by Beautypelt on Nov 27, 2006 18:02:39 GMT -5
Chapter 1 I woke up. It was a beautiful sunny morning. I got up and stretched. I walked over towards my grandmother, Holy Rain. She was awake too. "Grandmother, tell me about the polar bears!" Said I. "Polar bears are the biggest and toughest bears ever. They are found in Nome, Alaska. To get there, you must travel north and then west. If Snow Tribe joined us, we'll be able to reason with Blood Tribe. We need to find a brave bear that will go to Nome, Alaska." Said my grandmother. "I'll go." Said I. "Me too!" Said Ash Fall that was coming towards us. "You two? No offence, but you two are too young. We need older bears for the job." Said my grandmother. "But, we fought well agianst Blood Tribe! Look at me! I don't have a mark on me!" Said I. "That's true. You are strong, and brave. Hmmm...alright. You and Ash Fall may leave tonight. I strongly advise you two not to tell Red Wood. We must keep this quiet as possible." Said my grandmother. Ash Fall and I looked at each other with excitement. An adventure! An adventure with my best friend! When we bring Snow Tribe into our forest, we'll scare those cougar-hearted Blood Tribe grizzlies out of our forest forever! "You two forage for food. You'll need strength for your trip. When the others are asleep, I'll give you some herbs and traveling medicine." Said my grandmother. My mother licked us on our foreheads and went back to her den. "Nova Lee, we're going to Alaska!" Ash Fall squeaked in happiness. "I know! When we bring these polar bears to Blood Tribe territory, those grizzly bears would be gone forever!" Said I. "I know!" ASh Fall speaked happily. Ash Fall and I walked towards the river and the bushes. We need to eat plenty of fish and berries for our trip. (Fixed your error Saberclaw. -Moony)
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Post by Nothing but Silverwind on Nov 28, 2006 5:28:24 GMT -5
Woot!
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Post by Beautypelt on Nov 28, 2006 18:01:37 GMT -5
Chapter 2
It was night time. Ash Fall and I quietly walked towards my grandmother's den while our tribe was asleep. "Are you two ready for the trip?" Whispered my grandmother. "Yes." Ash Fall and I replied. "So am I." A voice came from behind us. ASh Fall and I turned around and saw my sister, Acorn Tree. "Acorn Tree, why are you here?" Whispered I. "While I was going to forage, I heard you three talking about the trip to Alaska. I thought I might come along too. Don't worry, I haven't said a word to anybody." Whispered my sister. "But Acorn Tree, the journey might be too dangerous for you." Whispered I. "Too dangerous?! Did you see me in battle? I think I'm worthy of coming along!" Insisted Acorn Tree. "I think another set of paws will be a good idea." Whispered my grandmother. "Well, you are my sister, so, you can come along." I whispered to Acorn Tree. "You three wait here, I'll go get you all the traveling herbs." Whispered my grandmother. My grandmother walked quietly to her den. A few moments later, she came back out with the herbs. We ate all of them. "Thanks Holy Rain!" Whispered Ash Fall. "Yes, thank you!" Whispered Acorn Tree. "Thanks." Whispered I. "No problem. You all may go. Good luck and may the spirits of Spirit Tribe be with you." Whispered my grandmother as she gave our heads gentle licks. Acorn Tree, Ash Fall, and I walked quietly out of our tribe. We were near Blood Tribe. "Phew! Those grizzly bears stink!" Ash Fall gagged. Just then, we heard pawsteps. The three of us turned around. To our fury, we saw a grizzly bear. "Back off or you'll feel the power of our teeth and claws!" Snarled I. "Wait! I mean you no harm! I'm Amber Mist! I only came to ask what you three are doing!" Said Amber Mist. "No of your buisness!" Snarled Acorn Tree. "I won't tell my tribe anything! My tribe is mean! If they heard me talking to you guys, they'll eat me for breakfast! All I want to know is what you three are doing!" Said Amber Mist. We saw what looked like honesty in this Amber Mist's eyes. "We are going to Nome, Alaska to find Snow Tribe, a tribe of polar bears, and bring them back to this forest so we can scare you grizzly bears away forever." I replied feeling sudden guilt. "Can I, come with you guys? I really want to be away from my tribe and I really want to be you three's friend." Said Amber Mist. "I don't know y'all, Amber Mist is a grizzly bear, and she's from Blood Tribe. How can we trust her?" Acorn Tree pointed out. "I say we wound her and driver her off!" Snarled Ash Fall. "If we did that Ash Fall, she'll tell her chief and her tribe will have another battle with our tribe. And, then our tribe will know about us sneaking away from our land. So, I say we bring her along. Besides, she looks honest and friendly. And, another set of paws would be useful." Said I. "Looks aren't everything!" Growled Ash Fall. "I say that Nova Lee's got a point. I say that she joins our quest too!" Spoke Acorn Tree. "I guess she can come, but I'm keeping an eyes on her!" Said Ash Fall. "I'm Nova Lee." Said I. "I'm Acorn Tree." Said Acorn Tree. "I'm Ash Fall." Muttered Ash Fall. "Nice to meet you all! I promise, I'll aid you all on our quest!" Amber Mist excitedly replied. Acorn Tree, Ash Fall, Amber Mist, and I walked quietly out of the woods. We said 'bye' to our forest home and left.
(Edited your error-Moony)
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Post by Nothing but Silverwind on Nov 29, 2006 0:52:07 GMT -5
Fantastic! Your description is very detailed and your plot is fabulous. Fantastic!
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Post by Beautypelt on Nov 29, 2006 19:10:57 GMT -5
Chapter 3
Our journey began. Were were now fifty pawsteps away from our home. The half moon and the stars shone down on us. I lead the way. We walked and walked. "So, where's Nome, Alaska?" Asked Amber Mist. "My grandmother, Holy Rain, says it's was up north. Once we get up north, we go west." Said I. "That's an awful lot of walking!" Gasped Amber Mist. "You're the one that wanted to come." Growled Ash Fall. I shot Ash Fall a glare and Ash Fall became quiet. My sister's eyes were alert and watchful. We walked and walked. Soon, our forest was no longer visible. "Ash Fall?" Asked Amber Mist. "What is it?" Asked Ash Fall. "How did your left ear get torn?" Asked Amber Mist. "It was two summers ago that my best friend had that torn ear. Now, I hardly reconize it. "You're cougar-hearted chief did that to me!" Snarled Ash Fall. "Hey! Don't be calling my father that!" Amber Mist snarled back. "It's the truth! You grizzly bears would look for any excuse to attack innocent bears like us!" Bellowed Ash Fall. "At least he doesn't yank out another bear's eyes out!" Amber Mist bellowed back. "I won't have done that if your kind won't have tried stealing our land!" Acorn Tree relpied ferociously. "I can't believe you did that to my little brother! He's only a yearling! He's chewing poppy seeds and he's got cob webs on his eye socket thanks to you!" Amber Mist roared at Acorn Tree. "My uncle can hardly walk because of your wretched uncle!" Acorn Tree roared back. "Yeah! Why can't you stupid grizzly bears leave us alone?" Ash Fall roared. "My family is only doing what they think is right! You know, my forest home is not the only forest on land! You black bears can go find somewhere else! Look at it this way, If you black bears leave, you all will have an entire forest to yourselves!" Said Amber Mist. "We been living in that forest long before you grizzly bears arrived! It is you guys that needs to go find another place to live!" Bellowed Acorn Tree. "Why do you even stand up for your family? I thought you said that they were mean!" Bellowed Ash Fall. "They may not be perfect, but their still my family and tribe! Great Spirt Tribe! No tribe is perfect!" Said Amber Mist. "Especially not your tribe!" Snarled Ash Fall. "Well, your tribe isn't exactly Spirit Tribe sent either!" Amber Mist snarled back. "Guys, please! Let's not argue! We have a long trip ahead of us! I certainly don't want to listen to all of that all the way to Alaska! Now, let us act our age and act like mature bears that we are." Said I. "Nova Lee's right. We shouldn't be arguing. We have a long trip ahead of us. If the polar bears saw us arguing, they probably won't help us." Replied Amber Mist. "Yeah, we shouldn't waste our valuable energy like that." Replied Acorn Tree. "I suppose your right." Replied Ash Fall. After putting an end to their arguement, we walked on and on. The night wind blew on our bodies. We Were now lots of pawsteps away from our home, and we have many more pawsteps ahead of us.
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Post by Grayshadow on Nov 30, 2006 9:23:00 GMT -5
keep going
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Post by Beautypelt on Nov 30, 2006 17:18:53 GMT -5
Chapter 4
The noon sun shone on our backs. We have been walking all night and all day. So, we decided to to go find some lunch. We were now in front of a forest we've never seen before. There was a river running about twenty coyotie lengths away. In the forest were some berries. My mouth watered in delight. "I can go catch us some fish." Offered Ash Fall. "I can go pick us some berries." Offered Acorn Tree. "We can also graze on the grass back there" Said I. "I guess we won't be hungry for much longer!" Acorn Tree replied happily. "Were's Amber Mist?" Asked I. Acorn Tree, Ash Fall, and I sniffed around for her. Then, we saw her eating something. We ran towards her. "EWWWWWW!!! What are you eating?" Retched Ash Fall as she contorted her face in disgust as we saw Amber Mist eating a deer that's been dead for a moon ago. "Carrion. It's my and my tribe's favorite food." We looked at the rotting and reeking deer in disgust. "It not that bad once you get used to it." Amber Mist replied with an embarassed look on her face. "Now I know why you grizzlies stink so badly." Muttered Ash Fall. I gave Ash Fall a warning look. "The maggots really bring out the flavor." Replied Amber Mist. I felt like I was about to throw up. "Do you guys want some?" Asked Amber Mist. "That's okay. You go ahead. Acorn Tree, Ash Fall, and I are going to eat fish and berries and maybe some grass." Said I. "Okay, go ahead. I'll just be eating this deer." Said Amber Mist. The three of us left Amber Mist to her deer as we foraged. I was feasting on some delicious grass. Ash Fall was gathering the fish she caught into a pile away from the river. Acorn Tree was putting the berries she picked into a pile. "Amber Mist doesn't know what she's missing!" Ash Fall grunted excitedly as she eyed the grass and the piles. "Amber Mist has her own meal." Said Acorn Tree. "Well, I say we can all eat the berries and fish now." Said I. "I sure caught a lot of fish." Said Ash Fall. "And, I picked a lot of berries." Said Acorn Tree. The three of us each took a mouth full of berries and we all pick a fish. I chewed the refreshing berries. I gulped them down. Acorn Tree and Ash Fall did the same. Then, I leaned down to take a bite out of my fish. Before I can take a bite, I smelled something. I lifted my head to sniff. "What is it Nova Lee?" Asked Ash Fall. "I smell something." Said I. The three of us were sniffing. The smell was a bear. "I smell another bear and it's not Amber Mist or us!" Exclaimed Ash Fall. Just then, we saw a figure running out of the woods. Then, it skidded to a hault. The smell belonged to it. The bear was a black he-bear about my age. He was panting heavily. "What's wrong?" Asked Acorn Tree. He looked at me with frightened eyes. "What is it?" Asked I. "Humans killed my family!" Screamed the terrifyied he-bear.
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Post by Grayshadow on Dec 1, 2006 9:21:31 GMT -5
Wow! Good job!
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Post by Beautypelt on Dec 1, 2006 9:27:18 GMT -5
In Chapter 1 on where I typed "My grandmother like us on our foreheads and went back to her den." I meant to type "My grandmother licked us on our foreheads and went back to her den." and in Chapter 2 were I typed "Back off or you'll the power of our teeth and claws!" I meant to type "Back off or you'll feel the power of our teeth and claws!" Can some body fix my errors?
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Post by [[_ moon/beam on Dec 1, 2006 18:05:53 GMT -5
Sure Saberclaw! I can do it!
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